Cheeky writing

I was stuck. The doors were  shaking. We were terrified. You're probably wondering how I got in this situation anyway well it all started with an argument.
 Me and my friend were mad at each other but I really wanted to say sorry to her so I called out to her “Aishani!” She came running over, she didn't look very happy at me though. I was shaking because I didn't know what to say to her. Then I had an idea I said “Can you come in this closet so I can talk to you?”
She looked at me and said “Fine.” We walked in the closet and she shut the door behind me. It made a  big click.  A few minutes  later we finished talking and we were friends again. When we went to go back out, I tried to open the door and it was stuck!  I tried to tell Aishani but she didn't listen to me. I shouted “Aishani it really is stuck!“ She walked up to the door and it didn't open. Then we started getting really scared and started screaming but everyone was outside so no one could hear. Eventually Immy  found us and got the parents. They all came and started banging on the door. I was terrified. After a few minutes of banging we finally got out. I sighed with relief. Everyone was so happy. I was not. All I wanted to do was go home and sleep. From that day forward, I never shut the door again.
By Addison
I am learning how to learn to use better punctuation. My writing was unistructural because I only used one bright spark word. And my next step is to us more bright sparks words and punctuation in my writing.



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